May 6, 2007
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Poem
This is one I tried to write ages ago and gave up on. Here’s my attempt at a rewrite. Still not sure it does anything for me so please give feedback.
The When of Waiting
You reached out and
cupped the back of my head,
pressing your lips
forcefully to mine,
opening your mouth
and mine to the taste
of each other.It was as if a great
division occurred,
separating my life
into two hemispheres.
One side holding all the moments
before we touched and
the other, the transformation
of passion on the life
of this woman ever
and forever after.
Comments (3)
Nicely done, Jan…
Yes, very nice. RYC: Yes, Rick’s star kind of faded with the 1960′s, his biggest hit probably being “Hello, MaryLou.” I recall you saying once you like folk music–I believe much of Rick Nelson’s music was put in the “Rockabilly” category–and I’m not sure what that means
Mmm, gave me a chill. Powerful. I kind of gave the words “and the other” more emphasis.