October 8, 2005
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Can’t think of a name for this poem…
I barely knew him
but it was beautiful
and had it not been for
the fireflies creating a
rope in the air joining
earth to the stars
(which looked like
the heavens reaching down
with luminous, undulating arms)
and had it not been for
the ethereal blended sound
of cicadas, frogs, and crickets
singing in the midnight air
wooing their prospective lovers
with mournful, seductive cries
and had it not been for
the fact I was lonely now
for way too long, he might not
have drawn me down and down
with myrrh soaked kisses
onto the silky wet bed
of dew slicked grass.
Comments (12)
I really like this one because there’s nothing more primal and innocent than getting to know someone new on an intimate level. All of a sudden, even mundane things in life are new again … or at least noticed in a new perspective …
Hi. Thanks for the 5 tidbits about yourself. It’s nice to get to know more about the person behind the words. I’m very impressed about all your languages! I go back & forth about the idea of kids myself. I know it’s a very personal issue. Pets are our kids, though don’t you think? This piece just flows so well. There is something strong about the pull of nature.
LOL…that pic of Boy George IS horrifying, isn’t it!
very powerfully written I must say…
I love this poem, but man, I can’t think of a title. Sometimes, though, naming it “Untitled” is okay.
Oh wow, I love the fireflies creating a rope to the stars
beautiful
As far as a title
I stink at titles
but you might try a line from the poem
since each line is lovely by itself
How about: In Memory of Erica Jong. : )
Surrender
Great writing. The title that came to my mind was ‘Luminous.’ Thank you so much for coming by and subscribing-love getting to know people, and experiencing their writing/lives.
Hello Jan, this poem is really good. I like the title ‘Surrender’.
I am not a good poet and even worse with titling them,.
I like that he kissed her with myrrh.
Take care
Peace and Love:)
this wonderfully alive.
and to answer your question, the first picture is of me before my homecoming dance.
the second picture i took the morning after.
<3
hi again. just a note to say i haven’t forgotten about trying out the BRIK. i’ve just been busy with a class & just posting what comes naturally. i’ll take a stab at it & let you know.i already have some scraps set aside