December 4, 2006
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Dionysus
I don’t think I’ve written something like this before. I’m excited about this poem. Its a little unusual for me…not quite sure what to make of it or even if I like it yet.
As always, your comments, critiques, etc., are coveted and always welcome.
Janette
Dionysus
When the supplicant first worshipped
the angel, his marble arms stretched
to welcome her reverential embrace,
and His face bore the marks of knowing,
the skillfully carved body taut,
muscled, and beckoning. He came
to life before her eyes, beauty and art
personified, his wings melting into
the still perfection of skin.
She washed his form with grateful tears
that her eyes should behold this wonder.
His hairless torso glistened like gossamer
beneath the afternoon sun and misting eyes.
Love was not yet known to her
and yet she ached. How intimate,
how intimate was his touch as she writhed,
awakening beneath the sweetness
of his breath, his hands, his body.
Their coupling was an act of holiness
beautiful in its violence, its fury,
a complete giving over of the flesh.
She explored every part of him, the
tender pink of his nipples, the down
of fire, yellow and white, the stone
he was carved from both sturdy
and pliable, this living shrine of
rock and velvet, silk and sun.
The temple of this familiar
haunted and haunting, the man-boy
and the child-woman, the breaths of
thankfulness, the weeping of the
bittersweet, the honey of forgiveness,
the hallowed ground of experience,
Amen and Amen.
Comments (3)
I like it …a real other worldliness , sensuality and passion all laced together in beautiful fashion
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Chris
Oh if only we could make men from silk and sun. . . well done. Wow
Very nice–I particularly like the first verse and the way it opens, but the whole thing is well written. This is just me from years of reading poetry, particularly contemporary, but the word “tears” is one that’s used and used. Someone suggested to me that the challenge of the poet is not to say new things, but to say old things in new ways–and you did excel on this one!
Keep up the nice work.